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A Scientific Discovery.... by ~ashellessmind:iconashellessmind:



A Scientific Discovery in Three or Four Parts

I.

We got
to the center of the
sun somehow. There
was a man there--
no one else saw him
--he was sweating rather
profusely, I suppose, because
he must have been
HOT in that tiny room so
full of such Large Lights.

He typed on a
smallish typewriter with
Thousands! Trillions! Infinite!
WPS. With Pages Soaring
like bold, white eagles in that finite
square of space. How did he manage
to type all that...
...fast?

Words on worlds: Earth
mentioned, of course and
also a few other
places. But, not quite so dreadfully
much describing Jupiter, which he
had a distaste for, I think.

If recollection serves, I offered
to relieve him. I was thinking,
“He must be so tired he
must have been typing for a longish
time and who would want
to type eternally? And who?”   And I
was thinking “No! Not me! Not in that
smallish room, No! And WHY?”

II.

The year is 2096.
Cars in New Newark fly through
four-dimensional streets looking like
four dimensional fire-demons all
over and under the outer-sky. They fly right through
you your three-dimensional body and
you sometimes don’t even notice
due to: You’re busy! And there is so much!
in every Second - Hour - Day - Time!

People have perfected the art
of walking place-to-place. No one ever
dies tragically anymore. Only accidentally or
incidentally, or never, maybe.

III.

“You have Nine Hundred Thousand, Six Hundred Fifty Two point Seventy Three hairs,”
He said. “Your toes are ten: one very calloused. Your lips, when they curl,
Make little diamonds out of skin.
Like a dew-drop strewn baseball field. Like shimmering, like snow.
Now I devised high-heel shoes and Socrates.
Gandhi, Mussolini, and the moose and wool.
I made cotton. I picked cotton
With those poor people you were supposed
To be ministering to even before you were born.

“I love you, obviously.
I Want You To Love Me.

“Why did you
Color yourself with metal cells?
Why did you come here with such fervor? Was it me?
Are you trying to escape me while
Walking into the light?”

I.

That man. Oh! I think
He must have been
God. I think He
knew I was coming.

Science says “NO,” of
course. It says “hallucinations! Visions! Fool!”
They teach us not to believe
these strange ideas, these strange
thoughts, these days. They would scoff, shout
“No one has ever heard such preposterous
hypotheses! Such ludicrous!” then
illuminate more ridicule.

But who has ever heard
of a little man
with a typewriter
typing your thoughts and
your feelings in the
center of the sun?
©2007-2009 ~ashellessmind
:iconashellessmind:

Author's Comments

Full title: "A Scientific Discovery in Three or Four Parts"
which of course is too BA for DA to Handle(A)


----- Lets see.
A man who is firmly dedicated to scientific discovery goes on a mad quest to make it to the center of the sun. He manages. Its kind of like a mount everest trip where you can stay only a few minutes and leave. While he's there, he, and no one else with him, sees a gnome-like man sitting at a typewriter. This is his description of that event.


Its in Sonata form. Which is to say... First a theme is presented, then the theme is developed on... and then a recapitulation. So thats why its three or four parts.

Its also an exercise with enjambment. When the man speaks, enjambment. When the typist speaks, traditional poetic structure overtakes. I thought about doing that part in Iambic pentameter or rhyme but... no.

I'm completely aware that the "science" in the poem doesn't work at all and before you get uncomfortable about that, consider that I did it that way very intentionally.

Its about everyone's quest for a deity, and how that quest can take an infinite amount of forms. I suggest he has "infinite words per second" and then connect that to "with pages flying" which are the pages of our lives... infinite amounts of them. There is no one way to God. This poem is just one page. (well its 3-4 pages but you get the point.) Its one of infinite ways to find God.

For a comment, tell me about your page leading to God. I'd love to hear.

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:iconashellessmind:
Well I love it even if no one else says anything at all because I am so HAPPY I finally wrote a poem.

A real one.

Not five lines of wordplay, a poem.

--
Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.
:iconotterhare:
this is stunning. it takes you along with it. running & thinking at once, with arms wide open. i'm breathless. :)
:iconashellessmind:
thanks a bunch. I appreciate the input

--
Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.
:iconsenoritarin:
i LOVED reading this, it's so beautiful!! im not sure what it means yet though. i wonder. i wonder mostly what you mean in your comment by "infinite ways to God." again....making me think :D
the way you use words is AMAZING!!!!! :D
:iconashellessmind:
oh sigh this isn't even the fully edited version. You people hopping about my poetry.... I suppose I'll have to go and fix it up now.

Thanks for all the exclamation points but I'm afraid I just don't know what to do with them all.

Might you have a few back?
Here --- yours to take: !!!!!

--
Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.
:iconsenoritarin:
hahaha XD no, you deserve the exclamation points! :D I'm impressed by your poetry ^_^
:iconashellessmind:
I just don't know what to do with them!

(you see how I gave that one back just now?)

--
Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.
:iconself-intoxication:
This is definitely interesting.

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*OoOoo.

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