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Too cluttered
in this home
for any poetry
so what
is to be done
but creep
into a corner
& write?

Besides
there is ambiance
here & perhaps
a little
humility
in the act of
retreating
to make space
for a poem.

So this is
an observance
as it were
without an observer,
a voice projected
onto walls
too full of spirit.
Yet Another Religious Poem
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i-too-am-karamazov's avatar
Not sure why but I just breathed a huge sigh of relief.

I like this work. The 'walls too full of spirit' had me thinking, but then I linked them up with the aforesaid 'ambiance' ...

For some reason, I'm thinking: walls, acoustics, soundwaves bouncing off the walls, projecting one's voice. These associations could provide just one more piece to re-enforce your walls. Like maybe instead of 'product' which is a little weak anyway:

So this is an observance
as it were
without an observer,
a voice projected into walls
too full of spirit.