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Closing your eyes,
bending at the edge
until your body forms
a toppled over "L",
until the blades
of your hair blow
in the canyon's
swirling winds;
releasing your hold.

Drinking red wine
even after noticing
the butler drip
cyanide in your glass;
mentioning your butler's
dedication in the will.

Spraying Raid
In your grandmother's
apartment though you respect
all life equally and though
ants are your favorite insect;
as a child, you read
about ants in a pop up
book your grandmother
bought for you.

Walking five miles
to reach a grocery store
because your vehicle need repairs,
because your pregnant wife wants
more peanut butter
and has become irritable; when
she complains you despise
being close to her.
:iconashellessmind:

Author's Comments

Still rough; please critique.
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Look at the last line of each stanza to see each stanza reinterpret itself.

What is grace to you?

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:iconyouinventedme:
I may have to read this a few more times
for further comment, but I quite like it.

particularly the last stanza.

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I am a poetry admin for =DailyLitDeviations.
:iconashellessmind:
Well, thank you.

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Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.
:iconunderground-rogue:
Beautiful. You have an excellent turn of phrase.

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Searching my heart for it's true sorrow
This is what I find to be:
That I am weary of words and people
Sick of the city, wanting the sea.
:iconashellessmind:
Thank you.

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Harmonize your inward and your outward life, and you soul will know no bounds of joy.

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